Friday, 27 May 2011

"Rose Cottage" by Clive Martyn

On the wooden gate the deep gouges from the mortician’s trolley had been filled in, smoothed, sanded and repainted. Where the bonfire had been lit on the grass, the furniture burnt, a new lawn had been laid. The front door had been replaced.
The broken doorjam repaired, painted and varnished. The hall carpet had been ripped up and binned. The blood on the tiles beneath had been scrubbed until only a faint trace remained. A new carpet covered those traces. The scratches from ten red nails dug into the plaster, the deep holes punched by the knife through soft flesh into the wall beyond, had been filled. Fresh green paint had been applied twice. Bloody handprints had been washed off the woodwork, the light switch. In the kitchen the buckshot and brains had been dug out of the ceiling, the holes filled and covered with coats of thick white paint. The corner window shattered by a piece of skull had been replaced. Bleach had cleaned the black and white tiles sufficiently. The maggots had been squished under foot and hovered up. Fresh flowers now stood where the note had been found.

The echoes of the argument…

..the screams…

..had faded.


“Oh it has such a lovely feel,” the young woman said, smiling as she walked through the hallway into the kitchen.

Her husband nodded. “I really like it,” he said, sounding surprised with himself, “and it’s on for 250?”

The Agent looked down at the details again, hiding her nerves, her excitement.

“Yes,” she said smiling as confidently as she could, “quite a bargain, don’t you agree?”

“Wow,” the couple said, grinning at each other.

“I think we should make an offer,” the wife whispered.

She was so quiet only the husband…

…and the house…

…heard.

16 comments:

Sonia said...

Oh that's creepy. The house is going to do something. I just know it.

Steve Green said...

Very nicely written piece, I have a feeling this couple are going to help history repeat itself in this house too.

Jen Brubacher said...

You gave me the shivers! Auuugh. I never want to buy a new house again. Brilliant stuff.

pegjet said...

chilling...brrr.

Cathy Webster (Olliffe) said...

Yah, but you just can't beat a view like that, brains or no brains!!!
Excellent!!!! Reminds me of a movie called the Sunshine Cleaning Company, about a girl who cleans up homes after murders. I think it stars Amy Adams - anyway, worth a look, but it's nowhere near as creepy and delish as this little gem of yours.

Clive Martyn said...

Thank you for the comments :) the idea came from a tweet from @thecharmquark who mentioned her neighbours were arguing again, which got me thinking...

Deanna Schrayer said...

Oustanding detail in this Clive, and I'm hoping you'll tell us about the "adventures" they have living here.

Icy Sedgwick said...

Wow, lots of flashes about houses! With a history like that, I should probably send in House Hunters Inc. But seriously, that opening paragraph gave me shivers.

Clive Martyn said...

I know its weird isn't it? I read your story title on FB and thought hang on a minute, Icy's written about house hunters as well :) but of course you had turned it on its head (as usual)

John Wiswell said...

Now see, I didn't read this as creepy. I've done plenty of bits about houses with personality. It witnessed cruelty, but it's been stripped down, cleaned up, and has a happy couple. Just because some ellipses are tossed in doesn't make it ominous. It's listening. If they bring in joy, they might have a happy haunted house.

Mike Robertson said...

Yeah, I'm with John. Has a good feel, not creepy. What's a little leftover brain splatter after all.

Nicely done Clive!

Anonymous said...

Like it :)

Clive Martyn said...

Thanks everyone - glad you liked this one.

John - i like your positive spin on it. Who knows... :)

Eric J. Krause said...

Very cool story. Some houses are haunted; some are just plain evil.

henriettamaddox said...

Loved this. So cleverly done and with so much thought to bring a wonderful picture of the renovated house with it's dark, mysterious past.

chandra said...

Interesting and noteworthy!
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